tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-10727233.post1304670011783408260..comments2023-10-17T05:09:09.069-05:00Comments on <center>Lanny on Learning</center>: Trickle DownLanny Arvanhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05597426421997599777noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-10727233.post-60340018106896990182011-07-21T09:20:49.554-05:002011-07-21T09:20:49.554-05:00Richard Reeves has a good brief history of this he...Richard Reeves has a good brief history of this here: http://goo.gl/4GcJfLanny Arvanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05597426421997599777noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-10727233.post-88900869387519182052011-07-02T11:23:13.445-05:002011-07-02T11:23:13.445-05:00Stephen - thanks for the suggestions. At the risk...Stephen - thanks for the suggestions. At the risk of over thinking all of this, here is my reaction. <br /><br />I'm getting two points from your modified version. One is about pruning redundant words. That makes sense. The other is about the rhythm of the piece. I've been doing that by what sounds right in my head, not by any rules. I've got other rhymes, such as <a href="http://lanny-on-learn-tech.blogspot.com/2010/12/filly-buster.html" rel="nofollow">Filly Buster</a>, that are similar in their rhythms. <br /><br />Perhaps on my next few attempts I will try to find pieces of music and write to those, so the music sets the rhythm, though that may raise the bar so high that I can't complete a piece. The only way to know is by trying to do it.<br /><br />Then in your version, the second verse has a different meaning. The tagline could be changed to, "Tax receipts thinning," which would get closer to the original meaning and keep your rhythm. But to me it would be less clear we're still talking about the Reagan era.<br /><br />When I'm making one of these, the process is something like - find an initial rhyme, here trickle down and clown, and then find an idea for the next verse, here clowns make you laugh so Arthur Laffer. In the rhythm choice I'm thinking about the second verse when I write the first. I thought about the tagline for the second verse when I wrote the first. I don't get much ahead of that however. In this particular case I got stuck after the third verse for a while and had to figure out how to segue from 1980 to the present.<br /><br />Perhaps the process needs to be modified too.Lanny Arvanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05597426421997599777noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-10727233.post-10675876482479995342011-07-02T09:11:17.107-05:002011-07-02T09:11:17.107-05:00Trickle Downes (revised)
Of Trickle Down
He's...Trickle Downes (revised)<br /><br />Of Trickle Down<br />He's been a clown<br />From the beginning.<br /><br />Arthur Laffer<br />Trickle's staffer<br />Our taxes thinning.<br /><br />In Trickle's tide<br />Boats mostly slide<br />Downward and spinning.<br /><br />The years have passed<br />Until at last<br />It's the ninth inning.<br /><br />While Trickle smiles<br />Impish with guiles<br />His buddies are winning.<br /><br />Shows must go on<br />Even Trickle's con<br />We whine, he's grinning.<br /><br /><br /><br />(just trying to help)Stephen Downeshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06140591903467372209noreply@blogger.com